I’m conducting a mini-experiment in writing style. I need your feedback, and I appreciate it a lot.
Which paragraph do you prefer? As you compare them, consider, first, whether one paragraph conveys information crucial to the core message of the paragraph that the other one omits and, second, which paragraph is easier to read and understand.
- It is uncontroversial that our conception of the world is at least in part reflected in natural language. Natural language displays a great range of types of referential terms that appear to stand for objects of various ontological categories and types, and it also involves constructions and expressions that appear to convey ontological or metaphysical notions, for example, identity, causation, parthood, truth, and existence. But it is nowadays also largely agreed that natural language reflects ontological categories, structures, and notions that not everyone may be willing to accept, certainly not every philosopher, but often not even an ordinary person when thinking about what there is and the general nature of things.
- Our conception of the world is at least in part reflected in natural language. Natural language displays a great range of referential terms that stand for objects of various ontological categories and types and involves constructions and expressions that convey such ontological or metaphysical notions as identity, causation, parthood, truth, and existence. But, some uses of natural language presuppose ontological categories, structures, and notions that not everyone may be willing to accept.
Which paragraphs omits information essential to the author’s intended message?
O Paragraph 1
O Paragraph 2
Which paragraph did you prefer to read?
O Paragraph 1
O Paragraph 2
Please comment, too.
A Keen Grasp of the Obvious 